Country Names (continued)

I mentioned that I had an idea regarding place names in one of the countries in Felmyr, the three island group off the coast of Midleset named Clover. It's to do with an invented script to represent the native language and I'm in the process of figuring out how to use it for place names on maps of the region without cluttering up the locations too much. I can use an example to explain.

Clover Script

Much like I explained how I'm trying to evoke certain markers with Midleset and Grimmsmouth, I'm trying to create a certain feeling around Clover, too. As stated earlier, I've decided to use the Irish language as part of the basis of this. But I'm trying to compliment that with an alphabet I've created to allow me represent the language on maps. It's based off of Ogham, which was used to write the early Irish language. It survives today as stone inscriptions.

I've messed around with this for quite a while and here's my final alphabet:
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And here are a few example place names from Clover written in that script. The direct English translations are above and the Irish is to the left:
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I hope you can see my intention. If not, my idea might not be coming across particularly well. I'm trying to take the visual of linear vertical inscriptions from stones and represent them as fragile branches or twigs. I'm hoping this ties in with how I want to present the country at a high level; a type of untamed land steeped in legend and old ways.

If you have any feedback on that I'd genuinely love to hear it. My hope with this thread is to gain an insight from others

Practical Use

I've tried finding examples of maps using linear scripts (I've looked at Japanese ones) to guide me in displaying the script on a map. Here's what I've created so far as a result of this:
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I've just placed it onto an old unused map I was drawing and stepped away from. It's obviously too Japanesey right now but I think it kind of works? Maybe?

I wonder if writing the Irish translation below is a bit cluttering? Maybe not if I don't go overboard with named locations I guess.

Anyway, that's enough on Clover for now. That was a tangent I hadn't anticipated at the beginning Next I'll move on to Midleset and look at naming places there.

Thanks for reading